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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 per cent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Nowadays, regarding feminist activists' efforts
women
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 are allowed to
work
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 and they comprise more than 50 per cent proportion of the labour force in advanced countries.
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, it is evident that the majority of high-status job positions are allocated to
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. whether or not providing
women
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 with high-level positions in companies has become a controversial subject.
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 essay agrees that
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 should have the right to be hired as managers , CEOs or members of the board.
Body paragraph 1
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,
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women
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 and
men
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 are physically or mentally different , they shouldn'
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 be assessed by their
gender
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. Each individual has its own capabilities that determine her/his competence.
women
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 shouldn'
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 be neglected because of their sex ,
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 their qualification as human beings should be evaluated.
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 means that
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 doesn'
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 determine a person's abilities ,
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 potential and hard
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 do. Megan Merkel is a good example of an individual who thrived regardless of her
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; because she had a chance to flourish and not her intelligence to be ignored.
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, despite the fact that each
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 group has its plus points , working alone and not considering the opposite sex's perspective might not lead to additional success. As mentioned before ,
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 and
men
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 vary in different aspects and when they
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 together, they can achieve numerous criteria. An example of parenting can be a good clarification to
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 statement.
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 psychology,
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 a child can be raised by a single parent , having a mother and a father helps the toddler's needs to be met better.
Conclusion
In conclusion, despite having
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 in the labour force , the assumption that only
men
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 must have the upper hand in companies should be reassessed and
women
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 should be given
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 chance to
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 in higher positions. First,
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 doesn'
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 determine an individual's capability.
second,
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integrating both genders in each section
due to
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 their unique viewpoints helps a company to improve.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender diversity
  • Affirmative action
  • Meritocracy
  • Quotas
  • Glass ceiling
  • Legal enforcement
  • Tokenism
  • Voluntary measures
  • Career progression
  • Representation
  • Workforce parity
  • Backlash
  • Historical imbalances
  • Corporate governance
  • Inclusive practices
  • Boardroom dynamics
  • Gender norms
  • Unconscious bias
  • Regulatory frameworks
  • Corporate ladder
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