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The table shows the proportion of fifty-year-old adults who were never married over five decades in Japan. The chart represents the Japanese marriage and divorce rate from 1970 to 2016. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of fifty-year-old adults who were never married over five decades in Japan. The chart represents the Japanese marriage and divorce rate from 1970 to 2016. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates
data
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 about 50-
year
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-old
year
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 Japanese
marriage
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 and
divorce
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rates
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that
marriage
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rates
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 are moving in a downtrend,
while
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divorce
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rates
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 have been running in an uptrend since the
year
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 1970. As a general trend,
marriage
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rates
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 in Japan are declining as
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divorce
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rates
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 are rising
together with
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 50-
year
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-old
adults
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 who have never been married.It is obvious that more
adults
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 in Japan are switching and remaining in a single lifestyle
To begin
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, the percentage of
adults
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 who have never been married has increased continuously. Starting from 2% in the
year
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 1970, concluding with 15% in the
year
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 2010.
This
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data
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 clearly indicates that, in the past 40 years from the
year
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 2010, the percentage of
adults
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 who have never been married increased by more than 7 times. Based on the
marriage
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 and
divorce
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data
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 which represents the
rates
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 from the
year
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 1970 to 2016,
marriage
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rates
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 started at 1,000,000
adults
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 in the
year
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 1970,
started
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and started
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 to have a strong decline until the
year
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 2016, concluding the
data
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 with slightly more than 600,000
marriage
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rates
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.
As
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Divorce
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divorce
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rates
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 which started in the same
year
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 at about 100,000
adults
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, spiked at its peak of about 300,000
adults
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 in the
year
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 2000,
stopped
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and stopped
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 at about 240,000 in the
year
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 2016.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words data, year, marriage, divorce, rates, adults with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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