Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter mention the food and service explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere suggest any improvements to make things better You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#week #birthday #friends #restaurant #success #food #service #atmosphere #improvements #addresses #sir #madam

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Dear Sir, I am Jhon and I celebrated my 21st birthday in your restaurant

last

week. It was a night party and my party

held

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was held

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hall no 02. First of

all

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I want to thank everyone

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your restaurant for helping me to complete my event successfully. Everyone enjoyed

really

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it really

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well and they have given good feedback about your services and food.

Food

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The food

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was very tasty and your staff took care of everything from start to end of the function.

Also

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the music band you provided was a really good one and their performance was really well. Everyone enjoyed their music really well.

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I need to mention

about

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apply

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the lighting and decorations you provided.

Lighting

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system and decorations provided extra value to my function. Everything was really well organized and my only

one

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concerned

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on that evening was the toilet facility you provided. That wasn't cleaned well. So please make sure to arrange

someone

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for someone

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to clean well before the function. Thank you. Kind regards Jhon

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

167 words

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