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Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter mention the food and service explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere suggest any improvements to make things better You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#week #birthday #friends #restaurant #success #food #service #atmosphere #improvements #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir, I am Jhon and I celebrated my 21st birthday in your restaurant
last
 week. It was a night party and my party
held
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on
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in
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 hall no 02. First of
all
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 I want to thank everyone
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 your restaurant for helping me to complete my event successfully. Everyone enjoyed
really
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 well and they have given good feedback about your services and food.
Food
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The food
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 was very tasty and your staff took care of everything from start to end of the function.
Also
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 the music band you provided was a really good one and their performance was really well. Everyone enjoyed their music really well.
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the lighting and decorations you provided.
Lighting
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 system and decorations provided extra value to my function. Everything was really well organized and my only
one
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concerned
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 on that evening was the toilet facility you provided. That wasn't cleaned well. So please make sure to arrange
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 to clean well before the function. Thank you. Kind regards Jhon
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