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Write a letter to apologise on the particular job you agreed to take during summer vacation due to some unforeseen circumstances. ● explain the situation ● state your apology ● express that you would be interested in this position next summer.

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Dear Joseph Braun I am writing to apologise for making mistakes and I am writing
this
 letter in response to your invitation to
this
 summer.
According to
 some problems and reasons. One of them I had an accident and was treated all summer long.Fortunately, I recovered in 3 months.
Therefore
, I could not go to work in your office. I am very sorry that I was not able to come. I did not want that to happen .I will try to correct
this
 error whenever possible . Once again,
sincerest
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I sincerest
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for
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for this
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 .I have a promise to work for your company next summer Yours, sincerely Bruce Lee
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Each paragraph should present a single idea or point and transition smoothly to the next.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your attempt to organize the letter is noted, but there are issues with clarity and logical progression of ideas. Maintain a logical sequence of information throughout the letter.
Task Achievement
Include specific details about your situation to fully address the tasks. Aim to give a complete account of the circumstances leading to your inability to fulfill your commitment.
Task Achievement
The tone of your writing is fairly appropriate for an apology letter, but it could benefit from a more formal and precise language.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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