the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value of export in 2016

the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value of export in 2016
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The given chart shows the
export
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earnings
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of different
product
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category
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categories
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namely petroleum
products
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, engineered goods , gems and jewellery, agricultural
products
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and textiles in 2015 and 2016.
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, the comparison of
product
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category
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categories
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in two years is
also
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given in
precentage
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percentage
. It can be seen that
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product
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the product
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category
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of petroleum
products
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were
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high in demand
while
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export
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earnings
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of textiles
are
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were
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less in demand in 2015 and 2016. In 2015, petroleum
products
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shows
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showed
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60
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billions
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billion
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of
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export
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earning
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earnings
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in
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2015 and
this
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figurre
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figure
went up by 3
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percent
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per cent
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in 2016 which made an
earning
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earnings
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of 63
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billions
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billion
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. Around 58
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percent
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per cent
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of
export
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earnings
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are seen in engineered
good
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goods
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and
this
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figure rose by 8.5
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percent
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per cent
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in 2016 . Gems and jewellery showed a high
export
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earning rate in 2015 which was approximately 42
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billions
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billion
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and
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figure declined in 2016 by 5.18
percent
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. Agricultural
products
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showed a similar trend in both years in 2015 and 2016. Only
0.81
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a 0.81
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percent
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per cent
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of difference is noticed in
this
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product
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category
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,
however
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, the highest difference
of
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in
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export
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earnings
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is shown in
textiles
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the textiles
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product
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category
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in 2015 and 2016 which holds 15.24
percentage
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. 25
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billions
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billion
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of
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in
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export
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earning
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earnings
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showed
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shown
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in 2015 and more than
of
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apply
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31
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billions
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billion
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amount is reflected in 2016.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, product, category, products, billions, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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