the chart below shows the value of one country export in various categories during 2015 and 2016. the table shows the percentage change in value of export in 2016
The given chart shows the
export
earnings
of different product
category
namely petroleum Fix the agreement mistake
categories
products
, engineered goods , gems and jewellery, agricultural products
and textiles in 2015 and 2016. Also
, the comparison of product
category
in two years is Fix the agreement mistake
categories
also
given in precentage
.
It can be seen that Correct your spelling
percentage
product
Correct article usage
the product
category
of petroleum products
were
high in demand Correct subject-verb agreement
was
while
export
earnings
of textiles are
less in demand in 2015 and 2016.
In 2015, petroleum Wrong verb form
were
products
shows
60 Wrong verb form
showed
billions
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billion
of
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apply
export
earning
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earnings
in
2015 and Change preposition
apply
this
figurre
went up by 3 Correct your spelling
figure
percent
in 2016 which made an Change the spelling
per cent
earning
of 63 Fix the agreement mistake
earnings
billions
. Around 58 Change to singular
billion
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
export
earnings
are seen in engineered good
and Fix the agreement mistake
goods
this
figure rose by 8.5 percent
in 2016 . Gems and jewellery showed a high Change the spelling
per cent
export
earning rate in 2015 which was approximately 42 billions
and Change to singular
billion
this
figure declined in 2016 by 5.18 percent
.
Agricultural products
showed a similar trend in both years in 2015 and 2016. Only 0.81
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a 0.81
percent
of difference is noticed in Change the spelling
per cent
this
product
category
, however
, the highest difference of
Change preposition
in
export
earnings
is shown in textiles
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the textiles
product
category
in 2015 and 2016 which holds 15.24 percentage
. 25 Replace the word
per cent
billions
Fix the agreement mistake
billion
of
Change preposition
in
export
earning
Fix the agreement mistake
earnings
showed
in 2015 and more than Wrong verb form
shown
of
31 Change preposition
apply
billions
amount is reflected in 2016.Change to singular
billion
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, earnings, product, category, products, billions, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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