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You have seen an adverstisement for weekend work in a hotel in the town where you are staying. You have worked in a hotel before and think that the job would be suitable for you. You must apply in writing. Write a letter to the hotel manager expressing your interest. In your letter . Introduce yourself . Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job . ask what work you would be expected to do

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter to express my interest in
this
 career regarding the current advertisement for the
weekends
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weekend
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 position at your
hotel
. My name is Ruqayah I am studying
for
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apply
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hotel
 management in master degree which means I am
a sutiable
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available
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 during the weekends I have been working at
Hilton
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the Hilton
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hotel
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Hotel
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last
 three months
ago
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apply
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as a receptionist I had
several
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apply
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experience during that time
therfore
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therefore
, I can
faces
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 any issue will happen to your
hotel
. I find
my self
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I
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 have plenty of skills in
this
 role first I can solve problems
with
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wisely
Second,
I am patient with
cutomers
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customers
third,
I am able to
working
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work
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 as
accountant
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an accountant
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my
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with my
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degree in accounting. I would like to
request to
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ask
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 you about
work
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the work
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 environment ,
moreover
 my duties if I
will
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apply
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work with you , what
tim
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time
 the work
start
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. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully, Ruqayah
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your letter follows a logical structure with clear paragraphs for each idea.
coherence cohesion
Use a more appropriate greeting and closing for a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Focus on one main idea per paragraph to improve coherence.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or evidence to support your claim of being suitable for the job.
task achievement
Maintain a more professional and formal tone throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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