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The data below shows the percentage of university students who were in part-time employment at five British universities between 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the proportions of part-time employed
university
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 students categorised into five distinct British academic institutions from 1998 to 2008.
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 the percentage of
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 type of student climbed in terms of three from five universities,
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Langsdale
University
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 a downward trend. Without a doubt, working part-time during the studies became more popular during the analyzed time period. Three out of five universities, to illustrate the point, could increase the share of
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 category.
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Middleridge
University
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Highcastle
University
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 increased their percentage steadily to 75% and 65 %, respectively,
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Finckleborough
University
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 interestingly experienced a steep growth from 18 % in 2005 to over 65 % in 2008.
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Langsdale
University
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 could not follow the upward trend and ,
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 ,in 1998, the percentage was outstandingly high
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 60 % compared to the other universities, despite some fluctuation from 1998 to 2002, a steady fall started in 2002 at 50 % and reached 30 % in 2008.
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