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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA Sodium Saturated fat 14% 14% 21% 16% 29% <26%< 43% 37% Breakfast Lunch Added sugar Dinner Snacks 42% 16% ⅜19% 23%

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA Sodium Saturated fat 14% 14% 21% 16% 29% <26%< 43% 37% Breakfast Lunch Added sugar Dinner Snacks 42% 16% ⅜19% 23%
The given image depicts the pie charts representing the trends in the percentage of meals consumed by the USA. There are three types of nutrients considered namely
sodium
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, saturated fat and sugar. As can be seen from the graph,
majority
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the majority
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 of people
taken
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take
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sodium
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 and fats for their dinner time at 43% and 37%.
Likewise
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, the higher amount of sugar added in snacks at 42%.
Moreover
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, in lunch, people consumed
sodium
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 nearly a half percentage
while
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 saturated fat
taken
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took
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 equally same percentage. Remarkably, three types of nutrients are consumed
approximately
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in approximately
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 equal
amount
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amounts
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 in their morning routine in the USA.
Whereas
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, people are consumed
sodium
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 more than other nutrients at 43%.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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