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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart represents
differents
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 modem of
vehicles
 used in the
UK
 during the time period of 1996,1985 and 2005.
Overall
, there are four types of
vehicles
 that
had
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have
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 been used namely, Public transport, Private
cars
, Recreational
vehicles
 and Lorries and other
cars
 etc. In
UK
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the UK
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, Private
cars
was
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were
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 used the most among the rest of the
vehicles
. In 1965, Private
cars
was
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were
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 used by 40% of the people. Lorries and other
acrs
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cars
acts
 were used less by 20%. 25% of the people in
UK
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the UK
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 used public transport. During 1985, Recreational
vehicles
 were used least among
the
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apply
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all other
vehicles
. Private
cars
was
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were
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 increasingly higher in percentage
comparing
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compared
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 to the time period of 1965. And 20 years later, there
was
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were
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 drastic changes in private
cars
 as they were tremendously grown
upto
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up to
 60% of used. Over the changing years, recreational
cars
was
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were
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 put less in use. And most of the people
lived
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living
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 in
UK
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the UK
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used
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use
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 private
cars
 as a mode of transport.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, uk, cars with synonyms.
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