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The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast-food restaurants and sit-down restaurants per family. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari sons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of their food budget the average family spent on restaurant meals in different years. The graph shows the average number of meals eaten in fast-food restaurants and sit-down restaurants per family. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compari sons where relevant.
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The pie chart underneath illustrates the proportion of money invested by a family on
meals
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 in a restaurant and home in
ten
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ten-year
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year
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 intervals from 1985 to 2015. The line graph below compares the number of times
food
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eaten
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is eaten
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 by a family in fast-
food
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 and sit-down restaurants over
tha
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the
that
sapn
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span
 of thirty years.
Overall
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, most of the capital accumulated for
food
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 expenses was spent on
home cooked
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home-cooked
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food
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.
While
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 as per the graph, the proportions of eating
meals
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 in both
type
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types
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 of locations rose over the course of time,
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however
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however,
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 fast-
food
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 topped the charts. In 1985, only 10 per cent of the money was spent on restaurant
food
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,
this
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 value rose gradually over the course of the timeline and
end
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 by sharing equal distribution of wealth on both
type
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types
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 of
meals
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.
In
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 the beginning of the timeline around 20
meals
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 per
year
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 were eaten in both fast-
food
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 and sit-down restaurants. The former
food
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 chain did not gain popularity as compared to the latter one in the next decade. The number of visits to
a
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apply
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go-to
food
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 restaurants shot up incredibly over the timeline clocking up at a little more than 80
meals
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 every
year
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 by 2010.
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, sit-down
food
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 joints experienced
an
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a
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 steady increase over the span of twenty years before ending up at around 45
meals
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 per
year
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 by the end.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, year, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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