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The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first bar chart
represent
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represents
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 information about the proportion of males and females who do housework.
While
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 other gives information about the time
between
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apply
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males and females spend
to clean
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cleaning
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 the
house
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 in a country.
Overall
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, the proportion and the average of women who did take care of a
house
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 is highest than men in
prepare
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preparing
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 food,
clean
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cleaning
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house
Correct article usage
the house
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 and
take
Wrong verb form
taking
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 care of animals, but for fixing
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house
Correct article usage
the house
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 shows that men
was
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were
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 the highest than women.
To begin
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 with,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words house with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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