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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The pie charts
illustarte
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illustrate
 how various
kind
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kinds
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 of
energy
produced
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were produced
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 in France in the
year
of
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apply
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1995 and 2005.
Overall
,in both years Coal and Gas were the largest
source
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sources
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 of
energy
while
,
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least
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the least
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 generated electricity were Nuclear and other kinds . Among all types of
energy
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energy,
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 only Petro showed some
decrase
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decrease
decreased
 in the second
year
. In detail, both Coal and Gas had
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a little
little
alittle incrase
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a little increase
 in 2005. They were 29. 80% and 29.63% in 1995. It shows that only
1
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a 1
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% increase about 30.93% and 30.31%
in
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after 10
year
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years
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. Which together accounted for over half
trhe
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the
 production of
energy
 in both 1995 and 2005. Electricity produced by Nuclear was 6.40% in the
year
 1995 and it rose to 10.10% in 2005. Other kinds of
energy
 were
also
 increased
slighhtly
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slightly
 after 10
year
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years
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.
In contrast
, Petro was the only electricity generated was reduced in 2005 . It declined
nealt
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nearly
 10%.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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