The chart below shows the proportions of graduates from Brighton University in 2019 entering different employment sectors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart shows/illustrates the different industries for graduate
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and education occupied 16.3% and 14.7% respectively, and the politics and government departments were allocated 12.1% graduates’ Use synonyms
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as transportation and warehousing, science and technology, civil service, charity, sports and others occupied a quarter(7.8%, 7.3%, 5.6%, 0.3%,0.1%,Linking Words
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