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You are applying for a job. As well as attaching a CV, you need to write a cover letter explaining your reasons for choosing this particular job at this particular company, and why you would be a good hire. Things to include are: – Possible qualifications or reasons for you to be hired – Your energy and enthusiasm for the job – Your past experience in a similar position.

#job #cv #cover #company #qualifications #energy #enthusiasm #position
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Andini Natia, I am writing
this
 email to express my interest
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job
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 application in your company. I have read your advertisement
on
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 the newspaper and I want to apply as a photographer. I
am
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 working in
photography
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the photography
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 and creative industry for several years. I have
learn
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 about fashion, music, people and
behind the scene
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photo
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photos
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.
Moreover
, I have joined several
festival
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, fashion week and
competition
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competitions
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 for photography. I am a hardworking person and I can work well in
team
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.
Furthermore
, I am
also
 good
in
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 design, taking
video
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videos
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, editing
photo
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photos
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 or
video
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videos
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 and writing
article
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. So, I am confident that my
skill
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skills
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 and experiences would be excellent for
this
 position. For now, I am working
at
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local
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the local
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 retail industry as
social
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a social
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 media specialist. I am responsible for preparing the
moodboard
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mood board
, making content, editing the video and uploading
to
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it to
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 social media.
Moreover
, I am writing the caption. For your
condiration
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consideration
condition
, I
am attach
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 the CV below. Thank you for your attention, I look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Andini Natia
Submitted by andininatiaputri on

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task response
Ensure that the letter directly addresses the requirements mentioned in the job advertisement, and clearly explains the reasons for choosing this particular job and company.
coherence cohesion
Organize the content of the letter in a logical manner with clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Use appropriate transition words to enhance coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Expand the range of vocabulary used in the letter and ensure it aligns with the professional context of the job application.
grammatical range
Review and revise the grammatical structures used in the letter, paying attention to sentence structure, verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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