You recently heard about some new jobs at a local department store. You would like to work there. Write a letter to store manager of the department store. In your letter, -Explain how you heard about the job -Describe the kind of job you would like to have -Give details of your experience and qualifications

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Dear Sir / Madam, I hope you are in the pink of health I am writing
this
letter to express my
interested
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to apply
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in applying
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to your local store I have seen it on LinkedIn .
To begin
with I have
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a bachelor
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bachelor
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bachelor's
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degree in accounting I
garduated
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graduated
from
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2021 I have experience for the past two years in accounting, auditing, marketing and management I am preparing to take marketing courses at Cambridge University
moreover
, I got
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an IElTS
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IElTS
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IELTS
score was 6.5
nevertheless
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I have
recommendation
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a recommendation
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from
prevoius
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previous
company . I really want to get
this
job
for
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pay my bills and I have to pay installment payments . I would be grateful if you give me
this
role as an accountant I will be
sutiable forthis
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suitable for this
position. Please contact me at any time
would
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if would
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you like to arrange
an
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meeting to
speaking
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with you about
this
opportunity I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Kind regards,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clear paragraphing with each paragraph containing a single idea. Your letter should have at least three separate paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Focus on maintaining a logical flow of information throughout your letter. It should begin with a clear statement of purpose, followed by supporting details, and a polite conclusion or call to action.
task achievement
Make sure to address all parts of the task. This includes explaining how you heard about the job more clearly, describing in more detail the kind of job you are interested in, and expanding on your experience and qualifications relevant to the job you are applying for.
task achievement
Retain a formal tone suitable for a job application throughout the letter and address the recipient appropriately. Avoid casual phrases and maintain politeness and professionalism.
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