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The charts below show the proportion of British Students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the proportion of British Students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of British college
students
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 at one England university who could understand languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
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, in both years, the most significant proportion of
students
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 either only understood English or polyglot, which together accounted for over half the charts. There were notable shifts over the 10-year term. Disciples who only knew English comprised 30% in the first year and increased by 5% to 35%
at the end
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 of time. The same trend happened with
students
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 who were familiar with one or two other languages that were not European which rose 5% (15% to 20% and 10% to 15%, respectively) in 2010.
In contrast
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, pupils who only recognized French, German, and Spanish decreased over the period. French-tongued
students
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 reduced from 15% in the first year to 10%
at the end
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 of the year. A similar pattern happened with the Spanish-languaged
students
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 who fell dramatically, it began
around
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at around
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 20% and
then
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 fell behind to about 10%.
However
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, Germanic
students
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 stagnated by 10% in the two years mentioned.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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