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A company offers a temporary job with no salary, but it helps you to gain some work experience. Write a letter to the manager of the company.  In your letter,  -introduce your previous work experience  -tell the manager which department you want to work  -describe what expectation you have from the job

#company #job #salary #gain #work #manager #-introduce #-tell #department #-describe #expectation
Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing great. My name is Tajinder Singh. I am writing
this
 letter to express my interest in
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 job offered by your organization as a part-time employee. Currently, I am in
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 semester of my
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 degree in
software
 engineering. To talk about my professional
experience
, I have worked in various firms during my
last
 three internships as an assistant
software
 engineer.
Furthermore
, I
also
 have deep knowledge of different languages required for
software
 development
such
 as Java, Python and C++. Having
experience
 in the development sector of
software
, I would like to apply for a temporary job in computer programming as you are developing a new product. My previous
experience
 and skills will help you complete the project before the deadline. As a part-time employee, I would like to work five days a week because I
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every weekend. I hope
this
 job will add some quality
experience
 to my resume.
Moreover
, I would
also
 like to hear more about the work culture of your organization. Yours Faithfully, TS
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the logical structure of your letter is clear with an introductory paragraph, development of ideas in the body, and an effective conclusion. Use varied sentence structures to improve coherence.
coherence cohesion
Use a formal greeting and closing in keeping with the nature of the task. Ensure your closing remarks are polite and appropriate for a letter of application.
coherence cohesion
Keep one central idea per paragraph and expand upon it sufficiently before moving on to the next idea for better clarity and readability.
task achievement
In the letter, be sure to fully cover all three bullet points mentioned in the prompt to fulfill the task requirements. Each should be developed with specific details and examples.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter suitable for the target reader - the manager of the company. Avoid casual language and contractions to uphold formality.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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