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The table below shows the production of cacao beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of cacao beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables
illustrates
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 how many
cacao
beans
is
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 produced in 6 areas from 1992 to 1998.
Overall
, the number of
cacao
beans
 made in Africa and England witnessed a downward trend,
while
 the opposite
true
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 for that in
Asia
, Oceania and South
America
. It is
also
 notable that the production of
cacao
beans
 in South
America
 accounted for the highest figure
in
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 the beginning of the period, but in the end, it was replaced by that in
Asia
. Regarding the number of
cacao
beans
 produced in
Asia
, it stood at 1,19,000
tons
 in 1992 before considerably
increased
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 to 4,36,000
tons
 in 1998.
Comparing
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 to the production of
cacao
beans
 in South
America
, which started
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 higher than
figure
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the figure
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 in
Asia
, with 1,43,000
tons
then
 it rose to 3,89,000
tons
 and was surpassed by that in
Asia
in
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at
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 the same time. The same upward trend was seen in the
statistic
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statistics
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 of Oceania with 40000
tons
 in 1992, followed by a steady increase
by
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 roughly 27000
tons
 in 1998. Turning to the production of
cacao
beans
 in Africa and England, it began with 29000
tons
 and 56000
tons
, respectively, followed by a small downward tendency to 25000
tons
 and 49000
tons
 in turn. Considering that figure in North and Central
America
, after a fluctuation over
6-year
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a 6-year
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 period, it levelled off at 46000
tons
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cacao, beans, asia, america, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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