The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
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In the
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The
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given
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apply
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pie
chats
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charts
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illustrate the proportion of working
adults
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adults'
adult's
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activities during the weekdays and the
comparision
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comparison
between in
year
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years
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1958 and 2008. The activities are specified in six types, working, sleeping, relaxing at home, going out,
travel
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travelling
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to work, and other interests or playing sports. All the figures are presented in per cent.
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, it can be clearly seen that in both years, working and sleeping
is
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are
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the majority of
activity
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activities
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that adults
spent
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do
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. In terms
in
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of
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1958, working adults used
their
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apply
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most of
the
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time for working and sleeping in almost the same amount, 33% and 32%, respectively. Meanwhile, in 50 years ahead, working proportion was increased to 42% and sleeping decreased
for
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by
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8% compared with the initial year.
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, going out
experieced
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experienced
a
significat
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significant
drop, from 19% to 6%.
However
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, time for relaxing at home between 1958 and 2008, slightly rose by 5% to 13% in the
last
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year. Travel to work in 1958 only used 2%,
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in 2008 increased to 8%.
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, other interest
of
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playing sports has a minor change from 6% to 8%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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