3. You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and services. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter • Give details of your visit to the restaurant • Explain the reason for the celebration • Say what was good about the food and the seafood

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Dear Sir, My Name is
simrandeep
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and I am writing
this
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letter in regard to describe our satisfaction with the
food
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and services of your restaurant. Me and My 2 friends visited your restaurant
last
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Friday at 10pm. We were there for the birthday celebration of my friend Jassi
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celebrating the promotion of myself in our company. We
were
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planning
from
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for
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long
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a long
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time to visit your outlet, but We did not have any specific occasion for that but
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time we visited your inn and you
have
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provided
best
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the best
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services and
food
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, and we
are
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were
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pleased to be eaten there. The services provided by your staff were amazing.
In
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At
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first we had a parking issue as the
restaurants
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restaurant
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was too much and parking was full and we did not get any spot for parking, but your staff helped us there.
In addition
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to
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, we did not make any reservation before as we did not know about reserving the table and we were afraid that we would not get any table, but your team member helped us and gave us a good spot
for eating
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to eat
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.
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, the
food
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was delicious
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being
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affordable for everyone as the price of the
food
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was cheap, but the quality and quantity
was
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were
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very good. Thank you for taking the time to read my letter. Yours Sincerely, Simran
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly presents and develops a single main idea. Avoid mixing several ideas in one paragraph.
task achievement
Be more explicit in explaining why the food and service were good. Include specific details to strengthen the response to the task.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistent polite and grateful tone throughout the letter to match the purpose of expressing satisfaction and gratitude.
logical structure
Although the logical structure is fair, you could improve the organization of the letter by introducing clearer transitions between ideas.
greeting and closing
Your letter is missing a proper formal closing statement which is expected in a letter to a manager.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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