The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.

The chart below shows the proportions of british students at one university in england who were able to speak other languages in addition to english,in 2000 and 2010.
The charts demonstrate the proportion of British
students
at one university in England who were able to
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speak
other
languages
in addition
to English, in 2000 and 2010.
According to
the charts, the percentage of
students
speaking German and two other
languages
remained the same
percent
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in 2000 and 2010,
whereas
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other
languages
changed in 2010. The pie charts provide strong information, that Spanish
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the largest portion of the chart in 2000 (30%), meanwhile, German and two other
languages
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undoubtedly the smallest (10%). 20% of the
students
could speak in no other
language
except for English. In comparison, 15% spoke French and another 15% spoke another
language
too. In 2010 Spanish was 35% of all
students
, which means its percentage had increased. Another
language
's figure increased too and made up 20%.
Whereas
, no other
language
had decreased and
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comprises
comprised
comprise
10%.
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persentage
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percentage
German
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of German
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, French and two other
languages
have.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • proficiency
  • linguistic diversity
  • polyglot
  • language acquisition
  • second language (L2)
  • foreign language
  • fluency
  • working knowledge
  • mother tongue
  • language competence
  • language decline
  • cultural exchange
  • global language
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