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The table below shows the population ratio of males to females in six different regions in 1950 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the population ratio of males to females in six different regions in 1950 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the number of
males
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 per 100
females
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 in six different regions in 1950 and in 2005. The population ratio of
males
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 to
females
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 in Asia was the highest in 1950, with around 105.3
males
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 per 100
females
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. It slightly declined to 104.9
males
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 per 100
females
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 in 2005. There was a
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 modest slide in the figure for Central and South America, from 100
males
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 in 1950 to 97.5
males
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 in 2005. North America and Oceania saw sharp drops in the ratio of
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 to
females
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, decreasing
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males
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 per 100
females
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 and 3.2
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 per 100
females
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 respectively. Different trends are seen in Africa and Europe. The number of
males
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 per 100
females
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 in Europe was the lowest in 1950 (87.4), but it rose to 92.8 in 2005. The figure for Africa was relatively high, climbing from 97.6
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 in 1950 to 99.2
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 in 2005.
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males
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 to
females
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 decreased from 1950 to 2005 in most areas except for Africa and Europe. Asia is the only region where the number of
males
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 exceeded that of
females
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 in 1950 and 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender ratio
  • male-to-female ratio
  • significant changes
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • patterns or trends
  • regions
  • population demographics
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • cultural factors
  • anomalies
  • outliers
  • comparisons
  • data analysis
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