The line chart below shows the percentage of renewable energy production in Germany from 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The line graph depicts the proportion of renewable energy

result

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in 20 years (2000-2020) in German, the categories are solar, wind, hydropower and

biomass

. in the brief, it can be seen that

that

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the percentages in solar, wind and

biomass

showed an upward

tren

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, whilst hydropower experienced a downward trend over the period stated.

Initially

, in 2000, the solar category stood just above 0% and gradually

increase

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to about 10% in 2010, over the next ten years the

percentages

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percentage

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number significantly

rise

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to above 15%.

Futher

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Further

, Wind was notified as the highest percentage from all the categories,

started

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with just about 5%

then

dramatically

grow

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to under 30 and

reached

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the biggest number. Following that, there were

not

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significant

changed

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Biomass

Conversely

, the hydropower proportion right over the early period started above 5%, and it

was gradually decline

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gradually declined

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over the next mentioned years.

in addition

, it dropped to under 5% in 2020 which just far

fewer

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from

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than

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biomass

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Vocabulary: Replace the words biomass with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

159 words

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