Write a letter to the hotel making the arrangements. Let them know when you will be arriving and leaving, what type of rooms you would like, and ask them how much the weekend will cost. Also enquire about activities and places of interest near the hotel.
Dear Sir or Madam,
Hope you are doing well. I writing
this
letter to inform you about my staycation in your hotel. I would like to booked
for two rooms with Change the form of the verb
book
beach
view. Correct article usage
a beach
In addition
, could you please give extra
goods Correct pronoun usage
me extra
such
as hairdryer
and sunblock? Because my shower tools are missing.
I would appreciate Correct article usage
a hairdryer
if
you could let me know about the cost including my extra requests or any Correct pronoun usage
it if
possile
additional. I request rooms with beach view, and Correct your spelling
possible
then
with double king bad
. Correct your spelling
bed
Besides
that, could you set up my room near with playground or the other activites
for my children? Correct your spelling
activities
Such
swimming
pool or golf. Change preposition
as swimming
Futhermore
, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
me
and my Change the pronoun
I
familly
will check in on Saturday morning around 7pm and will Correct your spelling
family
posibly
check out on Monday evening around 9am. One more Correct your spelling
possibly
thigs
, could you please give me another Correct your spelling
things
advice
Correct quantifier usage
piece of advice
to
local places I should to go or historical sites?
I absolutely Change preposition
about
gratefull
if you Correct your spelling
grateful
are
fulfilled all my requests. I am looking forward to hearing Verb problem
have
a good news
from you.
Best Regards,Remove the article
good news
a piece of good news
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Task Achievement
Ensure clarity of time by using 'AM' or 'PM' correctly according to the 12-hour clock system. For example, you mentioned '7pm' as morning time, which should be '7am' for morning hours.
Task Achievement
Avoid informal language and contractions in a formal letter. Use 'I am' instead of 'I'm', 'it is' instead of 'it's', etc.
Task Achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter and use polite requests and inquiries rather than direct statements or demands.
Coherence & Cohesion
Structure your paragraphs logically, each revolving around a single topic. The current letter could benefit from separating requests from inquiries about local activities and providing a clear sequence of topics.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the prompt with sufficient detail. While you mentioned arrival and departure times and types of rooms, more details about activities and places of interest are needed.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite