Write a letter to the hotel making the arrangements. Let them know when you will be arriving and leaving, what type of rooms you would like, and ask them how much the weekend will cost. Also enquire about activities and places of interest near the hotel.

Dear Sir or Madam, Hope you are doing well. I writing
this
letter to inform you about my staycation in your hotel. I would like to
booked
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for two rooms with
beach
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a beach
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view.
In addition
, could you please give
extra
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me extra
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goods
such
as
hairdryer
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a hairdryer
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and sunblock? Because my shower tools are missing. I would appreciate
if
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it if
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you could let me know about the cost including my extra requests or any
possile
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possible
additional. I request rooms with beach view, and
then
with double king
bad
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bed
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.
Besides
that, could you set up my room near with playground or the other
activites
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activities
for my children?
Such
swimming
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as swimming
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pool or golf.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
me
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and my
familly
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family
will check in on Saturday morning around 7pm and will
posibly
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possibly
check out on Monday evening around 9am. One more
thigs
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things
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, could you please give me another
advice
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to
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about
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local places I should to go or historical sites? I absolutely
gratefull
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grateful
if you
are
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have
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fulfilled all my requests. I am looking forward to hearing
a good news
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from you. Best Regards,
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Task Achievement
Ensure clarity of time by using 'AM' or 'PM' correctly according to the 12-hour clock system. For example, you mentioned '7pm' as morning time, which should be '7am' for morning hours.
Task Achievement
Avoid informal language and contractions in a formal letter. Use 'I am' instead of 'I'm', 'it is' instead of 'it's', etc.
Task Achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter and use polite requests and inquiries rather than direct statements or demands.
Coherence & Cohesion
Structure your paragraphs logically, each revolving around a single topic. The current letter could benefit from separating requests from inquiries about local activities and providing a clear sequence of topics.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the prompt with sufficient detail. While you mentioned arrival and departure times and types of rooms, more details about activities and places of interest are needed.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Arrangements
  • Check-in/Check-out
  • Double room/Suite/Family room
  • Amenities
  • Rates
  • Reservation
  • Cancellation policy
  • Leisure activities
  • Attractions
  • Cuisine
  • Allergen-friendly
  • Excursions
  • Itinerary
  • Accessibility features
  • Anticipate
  • Assistance
  • Confirm
  • Enquire
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