many high level of positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than fifty percent female. compnies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. to what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Your essay does not directly address the topic question, which is about gender equality in high-level company positions, not about Valentine's Day gifts. Always ensure that your essay directly responds to the given question to achieve a higher score in task response.
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