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The chart above shows the percentage of people consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables divided by three categories of men, women and children in the UK between 2001 and 2008.

The chart above shows the percentage of people consuming five servings of fruit and vegetables divided by three categories of men, women and children in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
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The picture denotes the percentages of
men
,
women
 and children that
consume
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consumed
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fruit
 and
vegetables
 in
UK
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the UK
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during
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from
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 2001 until 2008.
Overall
,
women
 possessed the
higest
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highest
portion
 in eating
fruit
 and
vegetables
, and
in
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from
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 2001 until 2006, the percentages of all the categories almost
have
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experienced a rise
stability
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in stability
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. In every period,
women
eaten
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ate
have eaten
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fruit
 and
vegetables
 with the biggest value namely 21% in 2001, over 30% in 2006 and less than a third in 2008. 2006 was the highest percentage
between
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among
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 all
period
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periods
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. Perhaps, the reason
of
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apply
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women
 consume more
fruit
 and
vegetables
because
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is because
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 it was dietary
choises
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choices
 and health consciousness. In second position that consumes that food
was
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is
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men
. In 2001,
total
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the total
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portion
 of
men
 was 17%, 27
percents
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percent
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 in 2006, and 30% in the final result.
While
,
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apply
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 the children had the smallest rank in year-on-year analysis. 12% was
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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 of young people that
consume
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consumed
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fruit
 and
vegetables
 in 2001, and 2007 was the highest between 2001 and 2008.
In
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From
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 2001 until 2006,
portion
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the proportion
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 of
women
 increased, but it
has
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apply
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dwindled in 2007 and 2008. Wheres. the percentages of
men
 and children
was
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were
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 stable
in
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from
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 2001 until 2003 with
the
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a
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portion
12
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of 12
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% and 17%.
Then
,
in
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from
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 2004 until 2007
was
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there was
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steady
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a steady
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 increase, but both of these categories slumped in 2008.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, fruit, vegetables, portion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Consumption
  • Servings
  • Nutritional habits
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Fluctuations
  • Dietary choices
  • Health consciousness
  • Public health campaigns
  • Demographic differences
  • Statistical comparison
  • Healthy lifestyle
  • Year-on-year analysis
  • Gender disparity
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