One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In your letter: say how well you know your friend describe the qualifications and experience that your friend has explain why your friend would be suitable for this job.
Dear Sir/ Madam,
Hope you are doing well. I am an ongoing student of Hospitality course, first year. I am writing
this
letter to recommend my friend
name as a Change noun form
friend's
sports
trainer, in Summer camp.
Let me elaborate the
scenario. There was an advertisement, regarding Change preposition
on the
to
the Remove the preposition
apply
sports
trainer for summer camp on notice
board. My friend is interested Correct article usage
the notice
for
that application. He is physically fit and has received a gold medal in Change the preposition
in
sports
last
year. I think that he is appropriate for the post, as he know
a lot more about Change the verb form
knows
sports
field. Correct article usage
the sports
Apart from
this
he Add a comma
this,
spend
almost 2 Change the verb form
spends
hour
Change to a plural noun
hours
behind
doing physical activity each day. He had Change preposition
apply
also
cleared the physical check up in
Change preposition
on
first
attempt. By having these all skills, Change the article
the first
i
think he is perfect for the position.
Change the capitalization
I
Moreover
, during our school
trip
and whenever the Fix the agreement mistake
trips
Sports
professor is on leave at school
, than
he is given the in-charge to take those classes for students from standard 5th to 12th. Correct word choice
apply
However
he is appointed by the higher authority of the Add a comma
However,
school
. From the whole class he is only
Correct article usage
the only
one
student who got full marks Correct pronoun usage
apply
is
Correct your spelling
in
sports
activity. Apart from the basic needs, he also
knows a lot more till the olympic
level. After finishing Change the capitalization
Olympic
school
, he goes to the classes where he is get
trained in Verb problem
apply
this
sector. It
would be gratefulCorrect pronoun usage
I
,
if you Remove the comma
apply
offer
him his desired position. You can Wrong verb form
offered
also
interview him, for further
information.
Thanks for your consideration.
Yours Sincerely
Jay ChawlaSubmitted by hlife4454 on
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Task Response
To improve your task response, ensure that you address all the points in the prompt fully. Make sure to not only mention your friend's qualifications and experience but also provide specific examples and details that demonstrate his suitability for the job.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, establish a clear logical structure by organizing information in a way that follows a logical sequence. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. Additionally, use a range of cohesive devices (linking words) to connect sentences and ideas more smoothly.
Greeting and Closing
Opening and closing the letter appropriately is important. Start with a suitable greeting and end with an appropriate closing. The closing in this letter is correctly formal, but the greeting can be improved by deleting the space before the comma.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to maintain clarity and organization. The second paragraph needs clearer focus, separating your friend's personal achievements from his suitability for the job.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite