One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In your letter: say how well you know your friend describe the qualifications and experience that your friend has explain why your friend would be suitable for this job.

Dear Sir/ Madam, Hope you are doing well. I am an ongoing student of Hospitality course, first year. I am writing
this
letter to recommend my
friend
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name as a
sports
trainer, in Summer camp. Let me elaborate
the
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scenario. There was an advertisement, regarding
to
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the
sports
trainer for summer camp on
notice
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board. My friend is interested
for
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that application. He is physically fit and has received a gold medal in
sports
last
year. I think that he is appropriate for the post, as he
know
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a lot more about
sports
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field.
Apart from
this
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he
spend
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almost 2
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behind
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doing physical activity each day. He had
also
cleared the physical check
up in
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first
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attempt. By having these all skills,
i
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think he is perfect for the position.
Moreover
, during our
school
trip
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and whenever the
Sports
professor is on leave at
school
,
than
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he is given the in-charge to take those classes for students from standard 5th to 12th.
However
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he is appointed by the higher authority of the
school
. From the whole class he is
only
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one
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student who got full marks
is
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sports
activity. Apart from the basic needs, he
also
knows a lot more till the
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level. After finishing
school
, he goes to the classes where he is
get
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trained in
this
sector.
It
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would be grateful
,
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if you
offer
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him his desired position. You can
also
interview him, for
further
information. Thanks for your consideration. Yours Sincerely Jay Chawla
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Task Response
To improve your task response, ensure that you address all the points in the prompt fully. Make sure to not only mention your friend's qualifications and experience but also provide specific examples and details that demonstrate his suitability for the job.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, establish a clear logical structure by organizing information in a way that follows a logical sequence. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea. Additionally, use a range of cohesive devices (linking words) to connect sentences and ideas more smoothly.
Greeting and Closing
Opening and closing the letter appropriately is important. Start with a suitable greeting and end with an appropriate closing. The closing in this letter is correctly formal, but the greeting can be improved by deleting the space before the comma.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea to maintain clarity and organization. The second paragraph needs clearer focus, separating your friend's personal achievements from his suitability for the job.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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  • pragmatic approach
  • diligence
  • team spirit
  • engaging personality
  • mentorship
  • leadership qualities
  • communication skills
  • first-aid certified
  • discipline
  • adaptability
  • youth mentor
  • enthusiastic
  • influential coach
  • role model
  • positive reinforcement
  • camaraderie
  • empathy
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