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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two charts below illustrate the value of
goods
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 and services brought from
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 into
Newzealand
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New Zealand
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 between the years 1995 and 2004.
Overal
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Overall
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,
imports
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 from both countries fluctuated over the period of time. Both
in
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at
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 the beginning and end of the period ,
goods
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 and services purchased from
Australia
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 were higher than those from
Japan
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.
However
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,
imports
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 from
Japan
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 were higher than from
Australia
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. Between 1994 and 1995, imported
goods
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 from
Australia
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 remained stable at
NZ
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 4000
million
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dollars
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while
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 those from
Japan
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 increased slightly from
NZ
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 3000
million
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dollars
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 to
Nz4000
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NZ 4000
million
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dollars
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.
However
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, there was significant growth in
imports
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 from
Japan
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 from
NZ
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$4000 in 1995 to just over
NZ
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$6000
million
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 in 1997
whereas
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 imported
goods
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 and services from Newzealand rocketed from
NZ
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$ 4000 IN 1995 to nearly
NZ
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$7000 in 1996 and later dropped to about NZ5500
million
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dollars
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 in 1997 There was a plummet in
goods
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 shipped from
Australia
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 from nearly
NZ
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$5500 in 1998 to
NZ
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$3000 in 1999.
In contrast
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,
imports
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 from
Japan
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 fluctuated during the same years. There was a substantial drop in
goods
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 brought in from
Japan
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 from 2000 to 2004.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, australia, japan, imports, nz, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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