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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Goods transported in UK (1974-2002) 120 100 . - road water rail pipeline 80 Million tonnes 60 40 20 1974 1978 1982 1986 1990 1994 1998 2002

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Goods transported in UK (1974-2002) 120 100 . - road water rail pipeline 80 Million tonnes 60 40 20 1974 1978 1982 1986 1990 1994 1998 2002
The line graph depicts the types of transportation in the UK between 1974 and 2002.
Overall
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, there are four types of transportation
Correct pronoun usage
that occurs
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occurs
Correct subject-verb agreement
occur
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 in the UK
such
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 as road, water, rail and pipeline. All are shown fluctuation between 1974 and 2002.
To begin
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 with,
higher
Correct article usage
a higher
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 amount of
stuffs
Change the wording
stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 transported occurs
through
Change preposition
by
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 road by 70
million
Use synonyms
tonnes
Use synonyms
 in 1974. After 28 years it
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased
around
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to around
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 100
million
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tonnes
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.
Consequently
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,
least
Correct article usage
the least
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 amount of goods navigated through pipelines. It was shown to level off between 1994 and 2002 around 25
million
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tonnes
Use synonyms
.
Furthermore
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, water and railroad exports
shows
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show
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 equalization in the
started
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starting
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 year around 40
million
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tonnes
Use synonyms
.
Then
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,
water way
Correct your spelling
waterway
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 dramatically increases until 2002 above 60
million
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tonnes
Use synonyms
.
However
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,
railway
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the railway
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 was shown to decline until 1986, after following years it was raised.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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