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The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how some selected sectors in the UK
contribute
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 to the country's
economy
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economic
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 growth during 1900, 1950, 1975, and 2020. Over the period given, business and
financial
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finance
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 was the only sector that consistently increased. In 1900, the business and financial sector only accounted for less than 10
percent
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per cent
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to
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of
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 the economy of the UK. After a century,
this
 number significantly
rised
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rose
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 to slightly more than 30
percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
,
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 industry showed a completely different trend over the same period. Its contribution decreased drastically from about 45
percent
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per cent
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 in 1900 to only about 15
percent
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per cent
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 in 2000. Almost similar trend was shown by
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 industry. Despite the slight increase from 1900 to 1950,
it
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 contribution to
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the economy
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economy
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economic
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 growth of the UK plummeted from more than 50
percent
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per cent
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 in 1950 to only about 10
percent
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per cent
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 in 1975.
This
 number continued to fall until the year
of
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2000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Declining trend
  • Agrarian economy
  • Fluctuations
  • Industrial advancements
  • Recessions
  • Significant growth
  • Service-oriented industries
  • Dynamic economic structure
  • Traditional sectors
  • Modern service-based sectors
  • Urbanization
  • Technological advancements
  • Global market integrations
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