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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT.

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. SUMMARISE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURES, AND MAKE COMPARISONS WHERE RELEVANT.
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The
two
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 line charts depict goods that New Zealand imported from
Australia
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 and
Japan
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, between 1994 and 2004, showing the figures for each year. Both graphs are very similar, so it is possible to compare the data of international commerce between the
two
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 countries.
Overall
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,
imports
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 from
Australia
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 were bigger at the beginning of the period and much higher
at the end
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, compared to
Japan
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.
On the other hand
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,
imports
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 from
Japan
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 finished slightly lower than they started. The peak of purchases from
Australia
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 was in 2004 reaching 8000 New Zealand dollars,
whereas
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 the peak of
imports
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 from
Japan
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 was in 1997, getting more than NZ$ 6000. In
Australia
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's chart
were
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there were
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 four peaks,
while
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 in
Japan
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's chart
were
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there were
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 only
two
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 peaks.
To sum up
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, there was a clear fluctuation in all periods of the
two
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 line graphs, showing that
imports
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 changed a lot over time in the trade between these nations.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, australia, japan, imports with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • significant changes
  • consistency
  • variations
  • overall growth
  • decline
  • diverge
  • converge
  • spiked
  • economic policies
  • trade agreements
  • global economic events
  • predictive insights
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