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Band 4.5

The pie chart displays water consumption in six regions used in three different purposes presented as percentages.

The pie chart displays water consumption in six regions used in three different purposes presented as percentages.
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The pie chart displays water consumption for industrial , agricultural and domestic uses in six
regoins
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regions
 as
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a persentage
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persentage
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percentage
.
Overall
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, South America,
Cenrtal
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Central
Asia
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, Africa and South East
Asia
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 tend to
use
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 water for agricultural
use
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while
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 Europe and North America
used
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use
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 it in
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector. Regarding agricultural
use
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,Central
Asia
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 was the highest consumer at 88%, followed by South East
Asia
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 and Africa at 81%and 84%
respectivly
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respectively
.
In addition
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, South America had the largest
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proportion
propotion
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proportion
acconted
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accounted
 for 19%
at
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of
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 water domestic
use
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,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "displays" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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