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The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows a comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart below aptly demonstrates a comparison of different types of energy
result
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 in France between 1995 and 2005. The
percentage
 of gas from 1995 to 2005 was slightly climbed up to 1 respectively. The
percentage
 of Petro
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 dramatically fallen to 10
percent
. The
percentage
 of nuclear
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 gone up vibrantly. The
percentage
 of
other
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started
of
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 5
percent
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. The
percentage
 of coal was slowly climbed up from 29,80
percent
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 to 30,93
percent
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.
This
 pie chart
was
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 a stable trend with a lot of fluctuations
On the other hand
, the result of different kinds of energy
of
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 1995
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 slower than the different types of energy production.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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