One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In your letter: say how well you know your friend describe the qualifications and experience that your friend has explain why your friend would be suitable for this job.

Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
finds you well. I have a friend who
want
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to
apply
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apply for
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a job. His numerous skills and social methods will astonish you. There is all
basic
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information about:
Firstly
he
is
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has been
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my friend since I saw him in the military base
moreover
we both were pilots. We were in the same group and we did all
private
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the private
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missions that
was
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given by
president
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the president
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.
Secondly
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his experience in
military
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the military
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can be useful for
young
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the young
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generation. Just not being a
succesful
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successful
pilot, he took lessons from
painting
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a painting
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master and wants to open
art
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an art
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gallery. I think children will
joy
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.
Last
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thing is that you can think how
this
person
apply
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a summer camp
while
being a pilot
?
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He is retired and needs a job
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while
being a soldier. I will
wait
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your answer
an
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and
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he is
only
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the only
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person who is suitable for
this
job. Best, JoXa
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Task Achievement
Ensure your letter directly addresses the topic by adhering closely to the prompts given. You should explicitly state how well you know your friend, describe their qualifications and experience in the specific field of sports training, and explain why they would be suitable for this job.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your letter should follow a logical structure, beginning with an appropriate introduction, followed by separate paragraphs for each point you are making, and concluding with a polite closing statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea that directly relates to the task. Avoid straying from the topic by including irrelevant information or personal anecdotes unless they directly support your friend's qualifications for the specific job.
Task Achievement
Adopt a tone suitable for a formal letter. This includes using formal greetings and closings, avoiding slang, and ensuring that your language is polite and professional.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ardent enthusiast
  • physical education
  • sportsmanship
  • pragmatic approach
  • diligence
  • team spirit
  • engaging personality
  • mentorship
  • leadership qualities
  • communication skills
  • first-aid certified
  • discipline
  • adaptability
  • youth mentor
  • enthusiastic
  • influential coach
  • role model
  • positive reinforcement
  • camaraderie
  • empathy
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