You have returned from your vacation staying at a bed and breakfast. When you checked your bank account, you realised you have been charged twice for the deposit. Write a letter to the bed and breakfast host. In your letter: Thank the host for your stay Explain the double deposit charge situation Ask the host for a refund

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Dear Sir, I am writing

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letter to inform you that we got double charged for the wonderful experience at your hotel. My name is Roopkamal and we visited your hotel

last

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weekend . I am really

thankfull

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thankful

to our host who

provide

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provides

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our

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phenomenal customer service experience with

great

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deal of food and spa massage in the hotel for two days . Thanks for making my family moments unforgettable.

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, When I was coming back

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home

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I received

notification

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which state

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stating

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that I charged twice for

stay

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my stay

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and

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confirm

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with my bank before contacting you , they

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verified and

send

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sent

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an email

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which

confirms

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that our payment

gone

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through twice.

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, I would like to request

for

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the

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refund

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I attached the receipts below ,and

send

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my bank

manager

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manager's

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phone information ,in

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case

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query

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. I would really appreciate if you please look into

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matter and reply back to me as soon as possible. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal.

kmlchahal97Sun Mar 17 2024

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coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph has a distinct central idea and is supported by appropriate details. Although your letter generally follows this guideline, elaborating slightly more in each section could ensure your message is even clearer.

task achievement

Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter. While your letter is largely formal, ensuring consistency in language use (e.g., 'thankfull' should be 'thankful', 'send my bank manager phone information' to 'provide my bank manager's contact information') will improve the overall tone.

task achievement

To improve task achievement, ensure that the purpose of your letter is clear and that you address all parts of the task. Properly introduce your complaint, provide a clear explanation, and make your request for a refund directly and politely. Your letter does this well, but refining the flow of information can enhance clarity.

coherence cohesion

For coherence and cohesion, linking words and phrases can improve the flow of your writing. While you have structured your letter reasonably well, using transitions like 'furthermore', 'in addition', and 'consequently' can help in connecting ideas more smoothly.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

172 words

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