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The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of staff employed by age in the public sector in the UK in 2015 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of
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employees
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 each age in the United Kingdom between 2015 and 2020.
According to
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 the chart, it can be seen that the
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 of 21-30
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 and over 50 was the similar portion is 23%
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 the minority segment was the
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 of under 21
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 approximately 14% of the workers in 2015.
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, the majority of
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 was 21-30
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significant
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 increased 10% from 23% to 33% including the
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 of 41-50
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 was rise 9% from 19% to 28%.
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, the proportion of young people (under 21
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dropped from 14% to 12% and an adult (31-40
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) was 21% in 2005
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 it fell to 11% in 2020 so it calculated the minority sector in
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, the elder (over 50
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) was dramatically declined from 23% to 16%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words range, years with synonyms.
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