You bought a TV a week ago but when you got home you discovered it did not work properly. You called customer service to report the problem but you have not yet received any help. Write a letter to the company and in your letter: *introduce yourself *explain the problem *and state what action you would like from the company:
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing regarding my previous
week
purchase from your store. Change noun form
week's
This
is Zari Shamsa. Last
week I bought a 52-inch TV Model Nonzero from Sony
company. Correct article usage
a Sony
Although
I received a
very pleasant customer service and the store associate Correct article usage
apply
offer
a lot of information to help us choose a model which really Wrong verb form
offered
meet
our needs, Wrong verb form
met
but
after I Remove the conjunction
apply
instlled
and set up the device it Correct your spelling
installed
does
not work well.
After turning on the television, Wrong verb form
did
in
around 2 minutes it suddenly turned off. Change preposition
after
First,
I supposed it was by accident. However
, it repeated ever
time I powered on TV. Correct your spelling
every
Due to
occurring this
event in late
hours of the night, I postponed contacting Correct article usage
the late
with
your customer service Change preposition
apply
to
the next morning. Change preposition
until
However
, I have not received any acceptable service yet.
Considering the reputation of your store, it is expected to solve the reported issue as soon as possible. Additionally
, taking the type of garuantee
I Correct your spelling
guarantee
into
account, I prefer to exchange Add a missing verb
have into
with
another device Correct pronoun usage
it with
instead
of any repair.
Thank you for your attention to this
important matter.
Best Regards,
Zari ShamsaSubmitted by zari.shamsa40 on
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coherence cohesion
Try to use more varied and complex sentence structures to improve the sophistication of your writing.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for small typos or errors in spelling to maintain the professionalism of your letter.
task achievement
Consider elaborating more on the solution you desire, such as specifying a timeframe for the exchange or a preferred model, to make your request clearer.
task achievement
You have done an excellent job introducing the problem and stating what action you would like from the company.
coherence cohesion
Your paragraphs are well-organized around single ideas, which helps the reader understand your points clearly.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite