The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in economic sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.

The line chart illustrates the labour force employment in economic sectors during the period from 1930 to 2010 in USA. These five economic sectors include industrial sector, sales and office, farming and fishing and foresting, technical sector, and other services.
The given
line
graph demonstrates the work staff
hiering
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hiring
in the five different sections of
economy
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the economy
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over 80 years between 1930 and 2010 in the United States of America. The intended economic sectors consist of industrial, agriculture, fishing and foresting,technical and other services sectors.
Overall
, with a rapid
glance
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glance,
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it is
obviousely
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obviously
detectable that the group which
include
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includes
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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sector went on a different pattern from the beginning to the end of the time span of
studym
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study
while
other groups
follow
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followed
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the same stable pattern in the first half of
duration
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the duration
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and in the latter one all except
from
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other services group experienced a slight rise
untill
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until
the end point of their graphs. Moving to the details of
light
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the light
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blue
line
,
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apply
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shows that the rate of
employement
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employment
in
farmingm
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farming
fishing and foresting part was almost stable from 1930 to 1960
whith
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with
which
subtle
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a subtle
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decreasing
frome
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from
just less than 80
employer
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employers
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to just above 60 individuals. Afterward 1960, the
hiering
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hiring
hearing
work force
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workforce
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in these sections slumped sharply to reach just a bit above zero
at
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in
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2010. Diving into the other
line
of the graphs reveals that despite the purple
line
, which is related to other services employment, and
remain
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remains
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approximately stable
around
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at around
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10 over
whole
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the whole
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80 years, the others after 1980 changed towards the more number of
hierd
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hard
hired
cases which ended to 20, 30, and just less than 40 in green, red, and dark blue lines respectively.
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