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The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.

The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.
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The bar charts provide gender
dissagregated
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disaggregated
 data across different
age
group
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groups
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 on the percentage of
Australian
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the Australian
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 population who saw reality and game shows.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that reality shows are more popular
on
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among
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 women,
while
 the highest percentage of
population
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the population
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 who watch game shows are men. The first chart shows that almost 70%
women
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of women
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 watch reality shows and the proportion of men who
watched
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watch
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 the show is only
aproximately
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approximately
 35%. People
whose
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who
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age
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are
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 more than 45 years old watch the shows most often. The next chart
describe
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describes
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 that
female
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females
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 are watching the game shows almost as much as
male
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males
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. People whose
age
 above 45 years old watch the shows most often,
while
 people
who
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apply
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between
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the age
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age
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ages
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25
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of 25
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-34 watch
it
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them
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 least often.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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