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The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of illiterate male and female in 6 different regions in the last year. Overall, it can be seen that South Asia had the highest rate of illteracy whereas developed countries has the lowest one. Additionally, the number of illiterary female was always more than that of male in all region during the survey. Regarding 3 regions that had a low percentage of people in illiteracy. In developed countries and Latin American or Caribbean, both the illteracy rate of males and females was similar, about 2% apart. Meanwhile, exactly 20% of illiterate females in East Asia,which doubled that of males. Turning to 3 remaining regions where the rate of illiterate people was high. There are above 30%, under 32% and approximately 35% male in illiteracy in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia, respectively. All of them was two of third that of females.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of illiterate male and female in 6 different regions in the last year. Overall, it can be seen that South Asia had the highest rate of illteracy whereas developed countries has the lowest one. Additionally, the number of illiterary female was always more than that of male in all region during the survey. Regarding 3 regions that had a low percentage of people in illiteracy. In developed countries and Latin American or Caribbean, both the illteracy rate of males and females was similar, about 2% apart. Meanwhile, exactly 20% of illiterate females in East Asia,which doubled that of males. Turning to 3 remaining regions where the rate of illiterate people was high. There are above 30%, under 32% and approximately 35% male in illiteracy in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia, respectively. All of them was two of third that of females.
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bar chart illustrates the percentage of illiterate
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in 6 different regions in the
last
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 year.
Overall
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, it can be seen that South Asia had the highest rate of
illteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
whereas
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 developed countries
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 the lowest one.
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, the number of
illiterary
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illiteracy
literary
female
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females
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 was always more than that of
male
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males
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 in all
region
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regions
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 during the survey. Regarding 3 regions that had a low percentage of people
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in
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illiteracy. In developed countries and Latin
American
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 or
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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, both the
illteracy
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illiteracy
literacy
 rate of males and females was similar, about 2% apart. Meanwhile, exactly 20% of illiterate females in East Asia,
which
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 doubled that of males. Turning to 3 remaining regions where the rate of illiterate people was high. There are above 30%, under 32% and approximately 35% male
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in
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illiteracy in Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States and South Asia, respectively. All of them
was
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 two
of
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 third that of females.

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