The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.

The bar graphs illustrate the proportion of who watched reality and game shows in men and women and 16-24, 25-34, 35-44 and 45+ age groups in Australia.
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different genders and duration of ages. For the
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shows, as the top figure shows, the proportion of
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is
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,no more than 40%,
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watched it.
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, both approximately 60%. We can
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