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The graphs below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years

The graphs below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years
The pie charts compare a variety of
energy
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 production methods namely, Coal,
Gas
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,
Petro
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, Nuclear, and others, in France in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, It is evident that
Gas
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 and Coal and
Petro
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 usage for
Energy
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 production are 3 highest proportions in both years.
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,
utilization
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the utilization
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 of Nuclear and Other types of
energy
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 supplies significantly increased,
Petro
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, meanwhile, saw a decline in its
contribute
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contribution
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 to
Energy
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 production. Coal and
Gas
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, with 29.80% and 29.63% respectively,
are
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were
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top ranked
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 in
this
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 department in 1995, closely followed by
petro
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( 29.27 percent).
the
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apply
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Gas
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 and Coal
possess
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possessed
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 about the same percentage in 2005,
while
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 for
Petro
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, the figure decreased by some 10
percent
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per cent
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 by 2005. 6.40% and 4.90% of
Energy
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produces
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produced
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 in France in 1995, came from Nuclear and Other means respectively,
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 Number almost doubled for both categories in 2005, resulting in the figure being 10.10% for nuclear and 9.10% for other.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, gas, petro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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