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ou ordered a new cheque book from your bank two weeks ago but you have received nothing. Write a letter to the manager complaining about the bad service. Say when and how you ordered the cheque book. Ask how much longer you will have to wait and ask the manager what action he will take over this matter.

#ou #cheque #book #bank #two #weeks #manager #service #action #matter
Dear Mr Sharma, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction about your services.
Also
, I am
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trustworthty
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trustworthy
 customer
in
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 your bank because I
am
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have been
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 using it
from
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for
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 a long time. To explain
about
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my
problmes
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problems
, I ordered a new
cheque book
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chequebook
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before
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two weeks through
online
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an online
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 service but I do not receive
yet
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it yet
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.
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with
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, I was
hope
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 that
i
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I
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will
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 get it in two days. The reason is that I really trust
on
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your services but now your bank
employer
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employee
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 takes too much time for any work. To
reslove
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resolve
this
 issue, please do take hard action about your system.
However
, I do not have enough time
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waiting
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 it since I need it for my office work and my clients are waiting for
salary
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their salary
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. Please, provide it as soon as possible. I will be waiting
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you
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a good response. Thank you, Yours faithfully, Harpreet.
Submitted by harmanpreetkang20 on

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Tone
Ensure to maintain a formal tone throughout your letter, as it addresses an issue with a service provider. Avoid informal expressions and strive for a more professional language.
Grammar
Pay attention to spelling and grammar. Review and correct simple errors, such as 'do not receive yet' should be 'have not received yet', and 'I am using it from a long time' should be 'I have been using it for a long time'.
Structure
To enhance readability, consider organizing your complaints and requests more clearly. Use paragraphs to separate different thoughts or requests for a more structured approach.
Task Response
Your letter successfully addresses all parts of the task, providing clear information about the initial action (ordering the cheque book), the issue (not receiving it), and the action you expect in response.
Structure
The letter has a clear beginning, body, and conclusion, which helps in delivering your message effectively.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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