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The bar charts shows the details the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia.

The bar charts shows the details the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia.
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The charts illuminate the percentage of two different
variation
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variations
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 of television
chanels
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channels
, which
is
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are
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 reality and game shows watched by men and women,
devided
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divided
 by age in Australia. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that females spend
their
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apply
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time more than males in terms of watching TV shows. Interestingly, based on the data shown, the older
people
can
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get, the more they spend their time watching shows on TV. The number of
people
 who watch reality shows shows a gradual interest rate, the more
people
aged
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age
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. Approximately
around
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50% of
16
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the 16
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-
24 years-old
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24-year-old
 group watches
the
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reality shows.
This
 number is rising to a maximum of almost 60% in 45 aged
people
 above. Despite the downtrend of game shows watching rates, from 50% in
young
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the young
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 generation, it
then
 dropped to just roughly 40% in
35
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the 35
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-44 years-old community.
However
,
this
 figure is rising to almost 70% in
45
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the 45
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aged
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age
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 group.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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