The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

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demonstrates

the steel production and

demanded

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in million tonnes and the figure of clerks employed in the steel

industrial

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in the

united kingdom

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United Kingdom

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in 2010. It can be easily seen that

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amount

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produced started with raising nearly 5000

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tonnes in about

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and it fails sharply before

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reaching

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remaind

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remained

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steadily over

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months.

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peacked

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september

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with

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5000 million tonnes. The figure

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it rose sharply

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over the period

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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