The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graphs below show the production and demand for steel in million tonnes and the number of workers employed in the steel industry in the UK in 2010.
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domenstrates
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demonstrates

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the steel production and
demanded
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in million tonnes and the figure of clerks employed in the steel
industrial
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industry

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in the
united kingdom
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United Kingdom

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in 2010. It can be easily seen that
,
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amount
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the amount

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produced started with raising nearly 5000
millions
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million

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tonnes in about
march
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March

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and it fails sharply before
raching
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reaching
racing

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April . After
that
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it
remaind
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remained
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steadily over
fives
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five

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months.
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However
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it
had
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peacked
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peaked
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at
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in

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september
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September

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with
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at

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5000 million tonnes. The figure
of
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for

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it rose sharply
to
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apply

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over the period

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Add more linking words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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