The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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number of a few different popular surgeries between gentleman and female in 2004. As it appears at the top of available statistics which are provided, hair transplantation in guy and eyelid surgery in women are the most popular procedures. They are numbered 60 and 330 in order.

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can conclude that ladies are more interested in surgeries related to beauty than men. The number of people who have done laser skin resurfacing in that year is 58 in comparison to more than 200 females which is a symbol of how much they care about their skin beauty and care.

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, women have performed rhinoplasty in an amount of 280 which enormously is six times more than men who underwent nose jobs. The other item that can be considered a high-rate surgery in women is liposuction or abdominoplasty, which is up to 120 in females and less than 20 in males.

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statistic reveals a result of high obesity in ladies in comparison to men. In conclusion, I would say the number of females who consider unnecessary surgeries is way higher than males. Sometimes we should take a look at the side effects of

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process which is not easily announced

due to

the beneficial advantages for some people.

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