The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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number of a few different popular surgeries between gentleman and female in 2004. As it appears at the top of available statistics which are provided, hair transplantation in guy and eyelid surgery in women are the most popular procedures. They are numbered 60 and 330 in order.

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can conclude that ladies are more interested in surgeries related to beauty than men. The number of people who have done laser skin resurfacing in that year is 58 in comparison to more than 200 females which is a symbol of how much they care about their skin beauty and care.

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, women have performed rhinoplasty in an amount of 280 which enormously is six times more than men who underwent nose jobs. The other item that can be considered a high-rate surgery in women is liposuction or abdominoplasty, which is up to 120 in females and less than 20 in males.

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statistic reveals a result of high obesity in ladies in comparison to men. In conclusion, I would say the number of females who consider unnecessary surgeries is way higher than males. Sometimes we should take a look at the side effects of

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process which is not easily announced

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the beneficial advantages for some people.

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The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people say that travel helps us to appreciate other cultures. How true is this statement? Do you think that people who travel a lot appreciate other cultures more than those who stay at home?

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With a fast pace of modern life, more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meal. Do you think the advantage outweigh the disadvantage?

The old generation often hold traditional ideas about the correct way of life, thinking and behavior. However, some people think that these ideas are not helpful for young people to prepare for modern life. To what extent do agree or disagree?

People in many countries are spending less time with their family. What are the reasons, and effects of this?