You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The chart depicted below
illistrates
Correct your spelling
illustrates
percentage
of travellers who visited four different attractions in Brighton including Correct article usage
the percentage
art
gallery, Add an article
an art
the art
pavilion
, pier
and festival between 1980 and 2010.
Looking from an overall
perspective, it is evident that pier
which had Correct article usage
the pier
lowest
point on Change the article
the lowest
chart
, was Add an article
the chart
a chart
least
popular than others. Rephrase
less
On the other
hand
Add a comma
hand,
pavilion
, which had highest
point on Change the article
the highest
chart
, was the most popular during Add an article
the chart
a chart
this
period.
According to
the bar chat
, at the beginning, approximately 23% of tourists visited Correct your spelling
chart
pavilion
,in 1980. After 15 years, this
number grows
sharply to Wrong verb form
grew
near
50%, in 1995, there was a drop in Change the word
nearly
this
number in following
Correct article usage
the following
15 years
period. Correct your spelling
15-year
Therefore
, in 2010, pavilion
had a share of 30% of tourists who visited Brighton and was the most popular attraction in 2010. Add an article
the pavilion
Pier
, on the flip side, which
was the least popular attraction among Correct pronoun usage
apply
tourist
in 1980, with 10%, Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
ràised
slowly to around 22% in 2010. Verb problem
and rose
Furthemore
, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
Pier
had the
third place among the attractions Correct article usage
apply
at the end
of this
priod
.
Turn to the Correct your spelling
period
festivel
, it was the first popular Correct your spelling
festival
atraction
Correct your spelling
attraction
between
tourists ,in 1980, with 30%, and it declined slightly to just below 30% in 2010 to the second place. Change preposition
among
Finally
, art gallry
, which had the most change compared to others, started at about 20% in 1980, followed by a Correct your spelling
gallery
sharply
rise to roughly 40% ,in 1985. After that year, it started to Change the adverb
sharp
went
down, Change the form of the verb
go
firstly
to 1990, with around 20% decline and secondly
with more than 10% decline to just below 10% in 2010.Submitted by mehdikarimi0811 on
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pavilion, pier with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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