You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The chart depicted below
illistrates
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illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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of travellers who visited four different attractions in Brighton including
art
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an art
the art
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gallery,
pavilion
,
pier
and festival between 1980 and 2010. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is evident that
pier
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the pier
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which had
lowest
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the lowest
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point on
chart
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the chart
a chart
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, was
least
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less
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popular than others.
On the other
hand
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hand,
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pavilion
, which had
highest
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the highest
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point on
chart
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the chart
a chart
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, was the most popular during
this
period.
According to
the bar
chat
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chart
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, at the beginning, approximately 23% of tourists visited
pavilion
,in 1980. After 15 years,
this
number
grows
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grew
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sharply to
near
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nearly
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50%, in 1995, there was a drop in
this
number in
following
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the following
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15 years
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15-year
period.
Therefore
, in 2010,
pavilion
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the pavilion
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had a share of 30% of tourists who visited Brighton and was the most popular attraction in 2010.
Pier
, on the flip side,
which
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apply
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was the least popular attraction among
tourist
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tourists
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in 1980, with 10%,
ràised
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and rose
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slowly to around 22% in 2010.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
,
Pier
had
the
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apply
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third place among the attractions
at the end
of
this
priod
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period
. Turn to the
festivel
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festival
, it was the first popular
atraction
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attraction
between
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among
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tourists ,in 1980, with 30%, and it declined slightly to just below 30% in 2010 to the second place.
Finally
, art
gallry
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gallery
, which had the most change compared to others, started at about 20% in 1980, followed by a
sharply
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sharp
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rise to roughly 40% ,in 1985. After that year, it started to
went
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go
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down,
firstly
to 1990, with around 20% decline and
secondly
with more than 10% decline to just below 10% in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words pavilion, pier with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.

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