The pie charts give information about the proportion males and females in employment in six categories divided into manual and non-manual occupations

The pie charts give information about the proportion males and females in employment  in six  categories  divided into manual and non-manual occupations
The pie charts show data about the rate of different
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genders
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in different 6
type
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types
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of work
include
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including
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manual and non-manual.
Overall
, it can be seen that the percentage of general labourers, craft or similar are almost same for female and male, meanwhile, there
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no big differences between
man
and female rate about
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categories. It is clearly observed that the proportion of
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females
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who work clerical or related is more than five times
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that
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man's
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of men
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.
However
, the total percentage of manual jobs shows that
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men
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prefer these
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jobs
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more than
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women
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by 62%,
33
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and 33
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% respectively. So
rate
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the rate
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of clerical or related is well over than
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men
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for women.
Moreover
, other non-manual for
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women
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is
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are
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slightly more than
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men
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like 3%.
On the other hand
, managerial and professional is the most popular job for
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men
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because of the highest percentage(36%).
To sum up
, there is no balance between gender and type of job preferences
by
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apply
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given information.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words man with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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