The pie charts give information about the proportion males and females in employment in six categories divided into manual and non-manual occupations

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts give information about the proportion males and females in employment in six categories divided into manual and non-manual occupations

The pie charts show data about the rate of different

gender

Fix the agreement mistake

genders

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in different 6

type

Change to a plural noun

types

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of work

include

Wrong verb form

including

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manual and non-manual.

Overall

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, it can be seen that the percentage of general labourers, craft or similar are almost same for female and male, meanwhile, there

Change the verb form

are

show examples

no big differences between

man

Use synonyms

and female rate about

this

Linking Words

categories. It is clearly observed that the proportion of

female

Fix the agreement mistake

females

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who work clerical or related is more than five times

than

Correct word choice

that

show examples

Use synonyms

man's

Change noun form

of men

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However

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, the total percentage of manual jobs shows that

Use synonyms

man

Fix the agreement mistake

men

show examples

prefer these

job

Fix the agreement mistake

jobs

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more than

woman

Fix the agreement mistake

women

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by 62%,

Correct word choice

and 33

show examples

% respectively. So

rate

Add an article

the rate

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of clerical or related is well over than

Use synonyms

man

Fix the agreement mistake

men

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for women.

Moreover

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, other non-manual for

woman

Fix the agreement mistake

women

show examples

Correct subject-verb agreement

are

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slightly more than

Use synonyms

man

Fix the agreement mistake

men

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like 3%.

On the other hand

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, managerial and professional is the most popular job for

Use synonyms

man

Fix the agreement mistake

men

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because of the highest percentage(36%).

To sum up

Linking Words

, there is no balance between gender and type of job preferences

Change preposition

apply

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given information.

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May 5, 2024

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Vocabulary: Replace the words man with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

158 words

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The pie charts give information about the proportion males and females in employment in six categories divided into manual and non-manual occupations

Write a letter to your friend who lives in another country and in your letter, - invite him or her to a public event in your country - describe the public event - explain other plans you have for your friend when he or she visits.

Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the street.Still there are robberies are happen that inside houses.What do you think Is the best things a person can do to ensure his or her security?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some argue that music mainly serves as a way for individuals to reduce their stress and anxiety. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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