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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given visual illustrates some information about the number who graduated and postgraduate working after college in the UK in 2008. The biggest amount in both of these groups was
further
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 study in
this
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 year. The number of part-time work in postgraduate students was almost 2500, but
this
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 amount in
graduated
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graduates
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 was almost 18000.
Also
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 unemployment in postgraduate groups and
graduated
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graduates
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 had a big ranking followed by 1,625 and 16,235. , which means that the difference between them was huge.The littlest amount was for voluntary work in postgraduate by 345 students and 3,500 members in graduate students. In
general
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general,
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 the number of graduates in all the categories was more than the other group of
student
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students
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 and
both
Correct determiner usage
neither
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 of
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this
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these
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 groups
didn`t have
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had
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 any persons who
work
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worked
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 in a full-time job.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate and postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time work
  • voluntary work
  • engagement levels
  • trend analysis
  • financial needs
  • social consciousness
  • practical experience
  • personal growth
  • international exposure
  • gap period
  • unemployed
  • economic reasons
  • career paths
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