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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph demonstrates the percentage of goods transported from Australia to overseas,
Japan
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,
US
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the US
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,
China
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, and
India
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 in over two decades from 1990.
Overall
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, as
it
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apply
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can be seen there were upward trends in selling goods to
China
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 and
India
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 within
twenty two
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twenty-two
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years
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,
while
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 decreased exportation to
Japan
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 and US was shown in the graph. Another interesting point is that the most amount of commodities were conveyed to
Japan
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 in 1990.
However
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,
China
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 took the first place of importation from Australia in 2012. Australian export with
Japan
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 was over 25
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1990.
Then
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, it dropped by 5
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percent
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per cent
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 in about 5
years
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 and remained just under 20
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percent
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per cent
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 over approximately 15
years
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. The exportation to
US
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the US
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 was about 12
percent
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 in 1990. It fell just below 10
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percent
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per cent
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 in 5
years
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 and
then
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increase
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increased
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 to the previous amount in the same period of time. But it decreased again over 12
years
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 by 5
percent
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.
China
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 and
India
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 had the lowest amount of
import
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imports
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 from
Austraila
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Australia
; about 2 and 1
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percent
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per cent
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 respectively.
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, the quantity of export to
Japan
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 increased steadily to 5 times more in over twenty
years
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 and it turned to over 5
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percent
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per cent
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to
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in
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India
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, china, india, years, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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