The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012 You should write at least 150 words.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

You should write at least 150 words.
The line graph demonstrates the percentage of goods transported from Australia to overseas,
Japan
,
US
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the US
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,
China
, and
India
in over two decades from 1990.
Overall
, as
it
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apply
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can be seen there were upward trends in selling goods to
China
and
India
within
twenty two
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twenty-two
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years
,
while
decreased exportation to
Japan
and US was shown in the graph. Another interesting point is that the most amount of commodities were conveyed to
Japan
in 1990.
However
,
China
took the first place of importation from Australia in 2012. Australian export with
Japan
was over 25
percent
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per cent
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in 1990.
Then
, it dropped by 5
percent
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per cent
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in about 5
years
and remained just under 20
percent
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per cent
show examples
over approximately 15
years
. The exportation to
US
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the US
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was about 12
percent
in 1990. It fell just below 10
percent
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per cent
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in 5
years
and
then
increase
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increased
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to the previous amount in the same period of time. But it decreased again over 12
years
by 5
percent
.
China
and
India
had the lowest amount of
import
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imports
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from
Austraila
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Australia
; about 2 and 1
percent
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per cent
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respectively.
However
, the quantity of export to
Japan
increased steadily to 5 times more in over twenty
years
and it turned to over 5
percent
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per cent
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to
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in
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India
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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